This is my third (and final) story for Susanna Hill’s Holiday Helpers contest for children’s writers.
CANDY CANE CLARA
By Sarah Meade
Word Count: 250
Clara loved candy canes.
Their bright stripes, sweet smell, and handy hooks.
She kept every candy cane she received, but she never, ever ate them.
One day Clara decided to get creative with her colossal collection.
She drafted and then began . . .
crafting!
Clara strung and sung, created and crooned until . . .
she ran out!
The Ho-Ho-Hollyfest was coming. Clara planned to win more candy canes at the Christmas Carnival. Last year Clara set the record for most candy canes earned: 217!
She needed more candy canes now that she’d begun her crafty creations!
She vowed to break her record and double her collection.
Clara and her friends arrived at Ho-Ho-Hollyfest.
“Where are the prizes?” asked Pippa.
“Where are the toys?” asked Jake.
“Where are the CANDY CANES?” cried Clara.
“I can’t find the prizes!” Miss Frost sniffled. “They must’ve fallen off the truck.”
No prizes?
No candy canes?
No breaking her record and doubling her collection?
Clara’s eyes stung with tears.
Then she saw the faces of her friends.
She considered. Maybe . . .
“I can help!”
Clara hurried home.
Quick as an elf, she dashed to her stash.
She sang as she collected . . .
“Candy-cane blocks in a candy-cane stack!
Candy-cane trains on a candy-cane track!
Candy-cane cars with candy-cane tires!
Candy-cane dragons breathing candy-cane fire!
Candy-cane dolls with candy-cane hair!
Candy-cane PRIZES EVERYWHERE!”
Clara carted her sweet treats back to the Christmas Carnival.
“Wow!” Pippa gasped.
“Amazing!” Jake cheered.
“Oh my!” Miss Frost cried.
“Happy Ho-Ho-Hollyfest!” Clara called. “Aren’t candy canes the best?”
Thank you for reading!
THIS WILL BE A WINNER! I LOVE YOUR REVISION!
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Thank you so much, Dedra! And thanks for all your helpful notes!
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Well done Sarah. You transformed this story completely. I like how you had her sing that one section in this one. Nice job! Good luck!
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Thank you, Ashley! Yes, this one changed a LOT! I’m glad you like the changes. Thanks for all your help!
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Great job! Clara to the rescue! Good luck!
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Jilanne!
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This is excellent! The problem, the solution, the rhyming . . . all so creative. Best of luck!
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Thank you so much, Becky! I appreciate your kind words.
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I love how effortlessly it flows now, Sarah! Great revision. Such a fun, heartfelt story. Good luck!
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Kim, thank you so much! I did make a lot of changes on this one. I appreciate all your help and your encouragement!
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Sarah, congrats on three entries! Oh I really loved the Candy Cane rhyme at the end. That was a brilliant read. SOOO catchy my 7 year old will love this! Good luck 🙂 Rosanna
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Thank you so much! Your kind words made my day!
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Love this one! Nicely done 🙂
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Thank you so much, Maria! Thanks for all your help!
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I love the rhythm of this story. It’s creative and fun. My kids would enjoy it.
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Thank you so much, Amy! I appreciate your kind words.
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